Well the first thing that jumped out at me was not including time values for the notes, but I'm guessing you mean the repeat signs, neither of which belongs there. (I had troubletelling which line/space some of the notes are on, but if I use the most forgiving interpretation of each questionable one it sounds okay.)
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Date: 2005-12-11 09:58 pm (UTC)